homework 12th Dec - Would you like brine with that?

All Registered Forum Users can participate in the writing exercises for the current fortnight.
Users can also participate in comment and constructive feedback in this Workshop.

Moderator: Shelley Hansen

Post Reply
User avatar
Wendy Seddon
Posts: 446
Joined: Sun Oct 31, 2010 5:20 pm
Location: Medowie NSW

homework 12th Dec - Would you like brine with that?

Post by Wendy Seddon » Tue Dec 06, 2016 2:23 pm

Challenging Maureen! (keep up the good work!)

I joined a group of friends to cruise a short way up the coast
and back again in just under a week.
Beginning of November was the time as picked by most
avoiding summer rains which could be bleak.

The lowering of clouds our third day on the briny seas
just added to the art of standing up!
The rocking and the rolling quite upset my pie and peas,
which did a slip and slide around my cup!

I took a class in Charleston, (the boat lurched at every kick),
the goal - a flash mob dancing ‘Gatsby Night’
I did perfect Flapper time, the boat did slow,slow quick!
Feather boa ‘round my knees was quite a sight!

An adventure edifying but I’ll not go back for more,
I’ve tried it once and had a brilliant time.
With never a dull moment until we returned to shore,
for now I’ll take my water without brine.
Wen de Rhymewriter There is nothing mundane about the ordinary.

User avatar
Shelley Hansen
Posts: 2269
Joined: Sun May 04, 2014 5:39 pm
Location: Maryborough, Queensland
Contact:

Re: homework 12th Dec - Would you like brine with that?

Post by Shelley Hansen » Tue Dec 06, 2016 4:57 pm

That's great, Wen! I'm not letting my hubby see it though - otherwise I'll never convince him to take a cruise!! :lol:

Love the "water without brine" line!!!

Cheers
Shelley
Shelley Hansen
Lady of Lines
http://www.shelleyhansen.com

"Look fer yer profits in the 'earts o' friends,
fer 'atin' never paid no dividends."
(CJ Dennis "The Mooch o' Life")

User avatar
Maureen K Clifford
Posts: 8156
Joined: Tue Nov 09, 2010 10:31 am
Location: Ipswich - Paul Pisasale country and home of the Ipswich Poetry Feast
Contact:

Re: homework 12th Dec - Would you like brine with that?

Post by Maureen K Clifford » Wed Dec 07, 2016 7:32 am

Well done Wendy, a great and may I say innovative use of the prompts and I agree with Shelley on both counts :)
Check out The Scribbly Bark Poets blog site here -
http://scribblybarkpoetry.blogspot.com.au/


I may not always succeed in making a difference, but I will go to my grave knowing I at least tried.

User avatar
David Campbell
Posts: 1232
Joined: Sun Nov 28, 2010 10:27 am
Location: Melbourne
Contact:

Re: homework 12th Dec - Would you like brine with that?

Post by David Campbell » Fri Dec 16, 2016 9:50 am

With you all the way, Wendy! I do enough lurching on dry land these days (a wonky hip and a dicky knee) without adding the rock-and-roll of the ocean to the situation. Definitely no cruises on the horizon.

Cheers
David

Post Reply