Isolated Outback.
Isolated Outback.
This piece, an integral item as part of my Amblin' Around Australia collection, is soon to be published in the UK.
There is a marvellous sketch which adds impact. Unfortunately, I do not know how to post it.
HELP please.
Following all the good advice, I've decided to give it a go - 'ere's 'oping -
Tibooburra -
" when it's HOT. "
Is deadly, dry and dusty, far too hot to think.
Even lizards carry waterbags
to often have a drink.
A scaly creature crossed the road
runnin’ the red dirt dash,
fast enough to be mistaken
for a country lightnin’ flash .
The bloke I ‘ad been yarnin’ to standin’ in the shade,
said
“See that scaly critter go - he’s really got it made”.
I asked
“ Isn’t it unusual to see that kinda thing" ?
hopin’ he would talk.
“Yeah”,
he said laconically –
“usually they walk”
(c).Rimeriter 2008.
There is a marvellous sketch which adds impact. Unfortunately, I do not know how to post it.
HELP please.
Following all the good advice, I've decided to give it a go - 'ere's 'oping -
Tibooburra -
" when it's HOT. "
Is deadly, dry and dusty, far too hot to think.
Even lizards carry waterbags
to often have a drink.
A scaly creature crossed the road
runnin’ the red dirt dash,
fast enough to be mistaken
for a country lightnin’ flash .
The bloke I ‘ad been yarnin’ to standin’ in the shade,
said
“See that scaly critter go - he’s really got it made”.
I asked
“ Isn’t it unusual to see that kinda thing" ?
hopin’ he would talk.
“Yeah”,
he said laconically –
“usually they walk”
(c).Rimeriter 2008.
Last edited by Rimeriter on Wed Jul 25, 2012 3:38 pm, edited 2 times in total.
Re: Isolated Outback.
G'day ...
.. you can post .jpgs here ... would advise that your largest dimensions be kept to a max of 600pixels.
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Then ... If you wish to attach one or more files enter the details below.
... and away you go ...
I notice your piece rhymes but it's in a interesting formatting. Different presentation - you're not ashamed of rhyme & metre are you? ...
Cheers,
Manfred

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I notice your piece rhymes but it's in a interesting formatting. Different presentation - you're not ashamed of rhyme & metre are you? ...

Cheers,
Manfred
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Re: Isolated Outback.
Good one Rimeriter - I like this a lot - typical Aussie laconic humour- can't wait to now see the piccie - bet it's a ripper.
And here is Rimeriters piccie reduced from Goanna size to water dragon size
Cheers
Maureen
And here is Rimeriters piccie reduced from Goanna size to water dragon size
Cheers
Maureen
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Re: Isolated Outback.
Yeah funny way you set it out but it reads ok.
I feel the need to tidy up the lines coming on to me !!!!
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I feel the need to tidy up the lines coming on to me !!!!
Settle Bob Settle.
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Re: Isolated Outback.
I love it
the style suits the theme and the word picture perfectly.
In my efforts to understand poetry, I think that the rhythm of pauses is just as important as the rhythm of the words. ( Bill the old battler knows that )
I think, in this piece, that the way the spaces are put, makes those sort of long pauses that you would experience while talking to a laconic bushie at a pub outback. To me the pauses give the right effect of that sense of slowness and drowsiness out the back of beyond where the most noticeable thing to happen on a hot afternoon is a lizard on the road.

In my efforts to understand poetry, I think that the rhythm of pauses is just as important as the rhythm of the words. ( Bill the old battler knows that )
I think, in this piece, that the way the spaces are put, makes those sort of long pauses that you would experience while talking to a laconic bushie at a pub outback. To me the pauses give the right effect of that sense of slowness and drowsiness out the back of beyond where the most noticeable thing to happen on a hot afternoon is a lizard on the road.
Neville
" Prose is description, poetry is presence " Les Murray.
" Prose is description, poetry is presence " Les Murray.
Re: Isolated Outback.
These details are copied from Document Info Details -
File Name RunningLizard.jpg
Document Type JPEG Image
File Size 218514 bytes
Color Model Gray
Depth 8
DPI Height 150
DPI Width 150
Pixel Height 1416
Pixel Width 1001
I use them as standard to suit my printed A4 sheets and Aussie Booklettes.
Much too big to post here Manfred.
Unfortunate.
Jim.
File Name RunningLizard.jpg
Document Type JPEG Image
File Size 218514 bytes
Color Model Gray
Depth 8
DPI Height 150
DPI Width 150
Pixel Height 1416
Pixel Width 1001
I use them as standard to suit my printed A4 sheets and Aussie Booklettes.
Much too big to post here Manfred.
Unfortunate.
Jim.
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Re: Isolated Outback.
I reckon it you post it someone on site can adjust it Jim.
Have a go,
Bob
Have a go,
Bob
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Re: Isolated Outback.
Well, bloody thing is there somewhere, I saw it in preview mode.
Yeah Manfred, I enjoy bumpin' words together 'n makin' 'em rhyme. Yeah, 'n alliteration too.
It will be great to see Tib+Liz when it appears soon in one of them 'posh' pommy mags.
Yeah Manfred, I enjoy bumpin' words together 'n makin' 'em rhyme. Yeah, 'n alliteration too.
It will be great to see Tib+Liz when it appears soon in one of them 'posh' pommy mags.
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There you go rimeriter you can take the big lizard off now I've made it smaller for you
Keep mannie happy - pleeeease. Just go into edit and remove picture and click OK when asked if you want to take it off. The picture Mate - nothing else.





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Re: Isolated Outback.
I reckon your picture conveys size Jim. Bloody big lizard though !!! I reckon Maureen might be a bit frightened.
Bob
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After you grasp that everything else seems insignificant !!!
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